Ken Pardo – Peer Review for Tamerlan

04.09.2025

TASK ORIENTATION

Does the essay follow the task? How do you know this? [Look at the assignment itself and the guidelines given.]

I believe this assignment does accurately follow the guidelines incorporating a successful introduction, body, and conclusion paragraph as stated in the guidelines in the assignment itself. In terms of the task orientation you do a perfect job based off the guideline.

STRUCTURE

Locate the thesis–and say it in your own words to be sure you understood it.

Now find the topic sentences. Does each topic sentences sum up or introduce its paragraph effectively?

 

I also believe that each topic sentence successfully introduces each topic well. I believe this is the case because not only do you repeat each subheading in your first few sentences but you also add words or paraphrases from the authors themselves to add more credibility. Additionally I am slightly lost when directly finding your thesis however I do believe I have a good understanding on your topic.

SUPPORT & ANALYSIS

Is evidence being used for any and all statements made? Does the author introduce, analyze, and explain the evidence? What’s the strongest piece of evidence?

 

Yes, I believe that you used a lot of evidence to support any statements being made. However I do recommend using a direct quote from each source instead of only paraphrasing. Although paraphrasing makes for a better understanding on the topic, without direct quotes you miss an important structural piece.

ORGANIZATION

Does the paper read smoothly? Are there parts that seem out of place or confusing? (Mark these. Give suggestions if possible.) Add any transitions that would make the organization smoother.

 

There are not any parts that are confusing, I believe that the overall paper does read smoothly from topic to topic. However, a suggestion I do want to add is that when beginning a new paragraph remember to indent, as you did struggle with it in all paragraphs. Adding on, using transitional words would help make it seem smoother but it is not necessary.

CLARITY

Write what you consider:

1. the clearest sentence:  Nostalgia allows people to reconnect with meaningful past experiences, strengthening their sense of self and personal values.
2. the most confusing sentence: Participants were randomly assigned to view either a nostalgic PSA or a control PSA.PROOFREADINGNote here any suggested changes in wording, grammar, punctuation, or spelling:

   There are not any grammatical issues with your paper. My only suggestion is as previously stated, don’t forget to indent all new paragraphs.

   OVERALL

   What single change would make the most improvement in this essay?

    

   I think the singular change that would make this a more successful essay is if you use direct quotes and then paraphrased or explained the quote after. I believe this would help you because it makes you seem like you have a stronger understanding on the topic.